Bracelet (rev 1.001 Akira)

[Akira]

I thought of titling it MIA, but decided to leave it more generic.

I think that is a good choice. I definitely caught a moment on the line "but I know that/he never made it back", wondering what from, and it does have a strong wartime overtone, but could be many things.

I also liked the first half of that, "but I know that", because I found it very subtly reinforces the age and increasing memory loss -- why not just "he never made it back"? Instead, we have the narrator almost reminding or assuring herself, or even struggling to hold onto, the facts which threaten to slip away. It creates a nice contrast of the wearing until it broke, which suggests intense intimacy, with the struggle to remember, which distances.