01-19-2016, 12:33 PM
When I first clicked on this, I was expecting a poem about running (something I enjoy), but now after reading it, it has still related to me! I grew up around boats and what not!
I think the commas could definitely be dropped, but it honestly comes down to the writers discretion. I would also change "percussive" to something more relative to writing for that line. Other than that, very well worded! I appreciate this piece, thank you.
I think the commas could definitely be dropped, but it honestly comes down to the writers discretion. I would also change "percussive" to something more relative to writing for that line. Other than that, very well worded! I appreciate this piece, thank you.