< whispered in an ear >

[rayheinrich]

Without the last line, your poem would become an outstanding haiku, one that a haiku journal might accept for publication.

Appreciate your comment and its intentions. The first three lines of the poem, while not a haiku, actually do make for a
better poem as I just hate author-supplied summations. That said, I'm willing to give up a bit of quality for the sake of
rhyme... the shame we poets must, from time to time, bear.