01-18-2016, 02:47 AM
(01-18-2016, 02:38 AM)Jeremiahcp Wrote: Thanks for the input, Ellajam. =) Perhaps, the word asshole is a bit too heavy. I could try the work jerk, and maybe that would be a bit lighter.I think it may be the meter of the line, I say "is a REAL ASShole", if you want to keep asshole you can try rewriting the line so that it matches the rest of the poem better.
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