01-09-2016, 09:55 PM
Beateater,
Nice to see sum flowin here, my favorite parts are the figure/winner set up an the general rhythm, nice and steady like good A'ccapella should be. From a rappers perspective there are alot of cliches (wheaties reference, generic sports reference, lullaby reference, gun/bullet reference/contemplation of material), but thats o.k.. My recommendation if you're going to continue with the rap style is to just get out of the box and try and say the same thing thats been said before but in a new way(basically just like poetry). For instance you could be like,
"Fuck it! Be my own father figure"
Pour wheaties-- get me swoll
raisin up to be a winner
Thats just one way, but one of the way cool things about rap is its a style dependent on vernacular; that said you can create your own, thats why its so powerful with the younger generations, its so easy to set trends due to internet and social media because its so easy for people to follow now. Nice rhymes tho,
mike
Nice to see sum flowin here, my favorite parts are the figure/winner set up an the general rhythm, nice and steady like good A'ccapella should be. From a rappers perspective there are alot of cliches (wheaties reference, generic sports reference, lullaby reference, gun/bullet reference/contemplation of material), but thats o.k.. My recommendation if you're going to continue with the rap style is to just get out of the box and try and say the same thing thats been said before but in a new way(basically just like poetry). For instance you could be like,
"Fuck it! Be my own father figure"
Pour wheaties-- get me swoll
raisin up to be a winner
Thats just one way, but one of the way cool things about rap is its a style dependent on vernacular; that said you can create your own, thats why its so powerful with the younger generations, its so easy to set trends due to internet and social media because its so easy for people to follow now. Nice rhymes tho,
mike
Crit away