01-09-2016, 04:15 AM
Have you considered "Christmas Tree" as the title?
It may seem too obvious a title for you, but I felt like an idiot once I read your explanation of the poem. It became a clear and pictured piece once I knew what the speaker was describing. Maybe it's just me, but I needed the "Christmas" tree to hit me in the face before I could see it.
Once I knew exactly what tree this was, the poem, and especially the ending:
Undistinguishable,
And entangled,
In a pile of sad trees.
Worked beautifully for me.
Thanks for sharing it!
TB
It may seem too obvious a title for you, but I felt like an idiot once I read your explanation of the poem. It became a clear and pictured piece once I knew what the speaker was describing. Maybe it's just me, but I needed the "Christmas" tree to hit me in the face before I could see it.
Once I knew exactly what tree this was, the poem, and especially the ending:
Undistinguishable,
And entangled,
In a pile of sad trees.
Worked beautifully for me.
Thanks for sharing it!
TB