01-08-2016, 09:27 PM
I too agree with UselessBlueprint. The vague nature of this poem could be chiseled into a more refined form. I'm in no way technically gifted but I think there is room for some succinct adjectives. "...demons to grow." could be subtly embellished, so could "safety" as you use it a few times.
In my eyes the topic at hand is an internal struggle. I feel that what you are trying to convey is a sense of poignancy in which one would find in the solace of acceptance, which - deliberate or not - is masked by themes of struggling and aggression.
But, above all
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In my eyes the topic at hand is an internal struggle. I feel that what you are trying to convey is a sense of poignancy in which one would find in the solace of acceptance, which - deliberate or not - is masked by themes of struggling and aggression.
But, above all
Welcome!