Jail Routines
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I like the list and the different types of things that are being compared. You could start the first few lines a little bit more interesting. Try starting off with something more exciting. I think some of the details that are listed throughout the stanza seem a little bit receptive or nonessential. I understand that is the theme here but I think you should eliminate a few.
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Jail Routines - by Weeded - 01-04-2016, 12:32 PM
RE: Jail Routines - by browtm7 - 01-06-2016, 05:46 AM
RE: Jail Routines - by Weeded - 01-06-2016, 09:32 AM
RE: Jail Routines - by emyleerose - 01-06-2016, 12:35 PM
RE: Jail Routines - by Julius - 01-12-2016, 10:09 PM
RE: Jail Routines - by Tiger the Lion - 01-13-2016, 12:35 AM
RE: Jail Routines - by Erthona - 01-13-2016, 02:49 AM
RE: Jail Routines - by Weeded - 01-26-2016, 04:43 PM
RE: Jail Routines - by RiverNotch - 01-26-2016, 09:40 PM
RE: Jail Routines - by BW BRINE - 01-27-2016, 06:44 AM
RE: Jail Routines - by drivingbothfeetondash - 01-27-2016, 12:13 PM
RE: Jail Routines - by Weeded - 02-13-2016, 01:13 AM
RE: Jail Routines - by Grim - 02-18-2016, 09:15 AM
RE: Jail Routines - by Weeded - 02-18-2016, 08:41 PM
RE: Jail Routines - by mackzmike - 02-22-2016, 06:17 AM
RE: Jail Routines - by Weeded - 02-22-2016, 03:41 PM
RE: Jail Routines - by 1skylande1 - 02-22-2016, 08:05 PM



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