Hanged Bottle [Edit 1]

[Emz]

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                      Hanging Bottle

Seen from the bank above a rushing creek,
this vision, serendipitous, appeared.
A headless reed arched, stronger than the rest,
and from its tip, knot naturally tied,
there dangled, by some random, weedy string,
a bottle left for dead, hung by the neck.

What did it mean?  A bottle hung like bait,
from some sly, tempting demon’s fishing-pole,
the sort of devil Bosch might have conceived,
stork-beaked and funnel-hatted - with his catch,
damned drunkards, writhing naked in his creel?
But that is not a faith revered today.

Hail, Nature!  See her uncaused grace displayed,
the random reed’s support, the vital lace
of duckweed tied, no doubt, in such a knot
as Man could scarce invent, like DNA,
self-organizing majesty, no God,
no man or thought involved, all-natural!

So there it stands, symbolic installation,
no sign of Man (except for that damned bottle).

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I see the darnedest things.  (Blank verse again.)

I love the combination of picture and poetry. 

This poem is good, but I believe it could use some trimming. 

I would also recommend using active voice. It's not "hung by its neck", it's hanging by its neck. 

What does it mean? A bottle like bait.

I wouldn't capitalise "Man" in the third stanza (but that's just really nit-picky stuff).

Just a few thoughts and pointers. I hope this helps! I look forward to your next revision