Learning
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(12-20-2015, 10:37 AM)TSlate Wrote:  A volume beckoned me to pry
its body open. I obliged,
and secrets slipped inside. My mind
devoured every pulsing line,
and brilliance sparked where words aligned.
Complete, I matched each gap to spine.
Not knowing where my friend belonged,
I laid it maybe somewhere wrong,
then gathered up my borrowed fund,
absconding soon as I was done.
Hello,

Very first post here, so just do apologize if I am not up to par in my critique. I very much enjoyed this nice short poem, and honestly do not see much wrong with it. Then again, I am brand new to this whole critiquing mess (at least, other than critiquing my own peotry, which happens too much) so I may be wrong, though hopefully not!

Absconding was a very good word choice, by the way, in my opinion.
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Learning - by TSlate - 12-20-2015, 10:37 AM
RE: Learning - by Achebe - 12-20-2015, 11:23 AM
RE: Learning - by TSlate - 12-21-2015, 10:47 AM
RE: Learning - by aschueler - 12-23-2015, 09:00 AM
RE: Learning - by Cpx - 12-23-2015, 10:00 AM
RE: Learning - by dukealien - 12-24-2015, 07:55 AM
RE: Learning - by Jeremiahcp - 12-26-2015, 11:55 PM
RE: Learning - by Shrewbe - 04-17-2016, 08:07 PM
RE: Learning - by Seanharvey - 04-19-2016, 04:59 PM
RE: Learning - by Erthona - 04-20-2016, 03:12 AM
RE: Learning - by Taboosun - 05-10-2016, 12:30 PM



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