Political Pastoral

[Tiger the Lion]

Hey Dale. First off, I'm glad you're back.  I'm not overly familiar with this genre but I'll chime in anyway. 

Political Pastoral 
                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                   
Come, listen to my song,
with ears long
like a hare
as she nibbles grass
over here, over there
and like her
be sure to praise my ass this works well but I think some punctuation after "ass" might give the reader a moment to appreciate the line
who like her nibbles nearby I'm not sure how you got away with no commas in this line. I would have used 2 and been miserable about it. 
having ears long
and a face to match
as he brings up the rear.
 
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Then come back when you've the chance reading this aloud I want it to be " you have"
to again hear me speak.
A speech to make babes smile,
giggle, burble, and laugh "burble" 
like a rivulet, shallow, not at all deep;  this is an awkward line for me - feels like repetition for the sake of rhyme. 
while mothers fear and weep
—after all I did get an "A" in sheep—.
 
Erthona

Critiques appreciated, but not required.  



 Nice to see something new. Is the title overly generic? 
Paul
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