Flight

[RSaba]

I'm a fan! This poem is haunting. The length is great, probably one of the things which makes it work best. Here are a few edits I'd suggest to help the narrative flow and for clarity:

I saw the poem in my head
the first time you couldn’t remember
my name, your tongue wanting
to say something, anything;
the sadness of it all floated,
catching on a bridge column,
swirling in the eddy,
caught by the undertow.

Your arms spread like sparrow's wings,
and I thought 
this is how they might look
flying into eternity.