11-29-2015, 07:11 AM
Ronsaik,
Thanks for the crit. We probably come from different walks of life, which is why you're unable to extract any meaning from this. Or perhaps I failed to effectively convey what I intended to. Anyway,
I see what you mean at "sirens bright."
Is there some sort of rule saying I cant invert word order?
The line I put fight/plight(intending plight to be a synonym to a man's "struggle," perhaps this is wrong word usage)
Again, perhaps I should focus more on the man I introduced in S3 to provide a better sense of intention, I'm not sure what a 'storyboard' is but it sounds like you take a rather formulative, logical approach to your writing. I dont
thanks again for the crit.
Thanks for the crit. We probably come from different walks of life, which is why you're unable to extract any meaning from this. Or perhaps I failed to effectively convey what I intended to. Anyway,
I see what you mean at "sirens bright."
Is there some sort of rule saying I cant invert word order?
The line I put fight/plight(intending plight to be a synonym to a man's "struggle," perhaps this is wrong word usage)
Again, perhaps I should focus more on the man I introduced in S3 to provide a better sense of intention, I'm not sure what a 'storyboard' is but it sounds like you take a rather formulative, logical approach to your writing. I dont
thanks again for the crit.
Crit away