Day and Night

[Achebe]

Day

light.
Golden gleams,----- since the sentence here is unrelated to the one below, best to end it on a full stop.
Women polite
to children's screams.
Noisy buzzing--
busy-bee's honey-
coating nests--
prep for rest.

Night

lights.
Tires screech
from sirens bright. ---- police LED lights can be bright and flashing, their sirens are only heard.
Peace we breach --- you can't randomly invert normal word order only for this line, just to make it rhyme with 'screech'
with what they call a piece.
Mark of the beast ----- I don't see a connection b/w 666, and the minds of owls. 
inside the minds 
of owl's blind. ----unintended apostrophe?

Day

light.
Glowing rays
meet the quite
quiet man's gaze. ----- the quite quiet man? That stopped being novel at 11
"The yellow isn't yellow,"
in his mind is what bellows.---- the forced rhyme cries out for mercy
So he closes his eyes
to meet the
Night's
lights.
To each his own,
be it fight or plight - it's all downhill from here on. Flight or plight is like "meat pie or constantly" - you can't sacrifice sense and logic at the altar of forced rhyme.

or flight or flown,
past tense if you're past tense
senses or apprehense.
Embrace dark's embrace
in place of light's emplace.

Overall, you need to stop trying desperately to rhyme and first figure out the central idea of of your poem. It can't be just to contrast day and night, because it's a waste of my time to read that day is about light and night about lights. It could be to point out that some people prefer one over the other, in which case you can't talk about just the one man whose mind bellows in S3 and extrapolate from that.
Once the central idea has been fleshed out in a storyboard, you can think about imagery and sonics and start writing the poem.