Vulnerable

[rayheinrich]

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Your thoughts about balance sort of concern me here Ray - I wanted it to be more of an "I suck" poem rather than a "I'm good/you're bad poem".
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Well... I didn't get the point of the phone business; I interpreted it as callous indifference.
On re-reading it, I see where the poem's not as unbalanced as I thought. (I seem to be having
attacks of marginally-useful first impressions recently.) Still, I think it needs one more understated
"I suck" implication. Maybe something the protagonist isn't even aware of, but the reader is.
Ray