11-24-2015, 01:46 AM
Hi there I enjoyed your poem and wanted to offer a few comments:
Like the other reviewers the expression 'creamy silences' piques my interest even if I have little idea to what it pertains
'Lonely white walls' is an evocative phrase. However stating' It's strange, really' seems a bit unimaginative
I understand that the poem is intended to be short however it does feel like it could be further developed with additional verse
Best wishes Deakin
Like the other reviewers the expression 'creamy silences' piques my interest even if I have little idea to what it pertains
'Lonely white walls' is an evocative phrase. However stating' It's strange, really' seems a bit unimaginative
I understand that the poem is intended to be short however it does feel like it could be further developed with additional verse
Best wishes Deakin