11-13-2015, 04:39 PM
After a breakfast
off to serious business
chasing the squirrel
I think the reader's smart enough to figure out what "chasing the squirrel" implies.
Then also, maybe, realize its double meaning. I'd leave that complexity alone.
Though maybe:
After a breakfast
serious business
chasing the squirrel
off to serious business
chasing the squirrel
I think the reader's smart enough to figure out what "chasing the squirrel" implies.
Then also, maybe, realize its double meaning. I'd leave that complexity alone.
Though maybe:
After a breakfast
serious business
chasing the squirrel
a brightly colored fungus that grows in bark inclusions

