11-02-2015, 08:20 AM
Abu,
I've thought about your input and while I appreciate it, I have to disagree. That being said, it is a problem if the message isn't clear enough that I have to fill in the gaps, but I am a little in love with the rapidity I wrote this one in.
This poem is about DC
I did get a buzz out of equating what goes on in DC to sex because politics is perverse. It's an old complaint, maybe overused, but I felt like writing about it none the less.
The poem is entitled Columbia because DC is the District of Columbia, and Columbia is the feminine symbol of freedom, democracy, and so forth. The "he" in the poem refers to God, referred to three lines behind "he jumped off the railing".
I think upon reading this and rereading the poem, the rest will fall in place for understanding the poem.
Kaxtar,
I really appreciate your warm reception of this one and I'm glad you thought so highly of it. Sorry the meaning wasn't clear enough, but I'm unsure if I'll rewrite this one or just move on.
Thank you both, I appreciate the comments!
I've thought about your input and while I appreciate it, I have to disagree. That being said, it is a problem if the message isn't clear enough that I have to fill in the gaps, but I am a little in love with the rapidity I wrote this one in.
This poem is about DC
I did get a buzz out of equating what goes on in DC to sex because politics is perverse. It's an old complaint, maybe overused, but I felt like writing about it none the less.
The poem is entitled Columbia because DC is the District of Columbia, and Columbia is the feminine symbol of freedom, democracy, and so forth. The "he" in the poem refers to God, referred to three lines behind "he jumped off the railing".
I think upon reading this and rereading the poem, the rest will fall in place for understanding the poem.
Kaxtar,
I really appreciate your warm reception of this one and I'm glad you thought so highly of it. Sorry the meaning wasn't clear enough, but I'm unsure if I'll rewrite this one or just move on.
Thank you both, I appreciate the comments!