10-28-2015, 11:53 AM
Is the poem about two (three!) lovers or about two parents and a child?
Lines 2+3 really made me think of this as a parent wishing to have a better relationship with their child and feeling jealous of their spouse.
"You tell her how you feel, but to me you're always fine
For a while I could not accept your denial of my importance in your life"
For me this was quite powerful. The "always fine" rebuff was very poignant.
The last part of the poem ("to see you with anyone else") makes it sound more like the two lovers theme, which was a bit less powerful for me. The tone of the line "Only because I am not fit for anyone" feels a bit off. There's some anger or sarcasm in there which is not reflected elsewhere.
I did like both readings of the poem, but I secretly hope its about a parent and child!
Lines 2+3 really made me think of this as a parent wishing to have a better relationship with their child and feeling jealous of their spouse.
"You tell her how you feel, but to me you're always fine
For a while I could not accept your denial of my importance in your life"
For me this was quite powerful. The "always fine" rebuff was very poignant.
The last part of the poem ("to see you with anyone else") makes it sound more like the two lovers theme, which was a bit less powerful for me. The tone of the line "Only because I am not fit for anyone" feels a bit off. There's some anger or sarcasm in there which is not reflected elsewhere.
I did like both readings of the poem, but I secretly hope its about a parent and child!