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The wharfie
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10-27-2015, 01:21 AM
I enjoyed reading this. It had a nice little ring of revenge in it. Honestly I think it could have been a little longer. I think the last line of the first stanza could have used one more word - maybe an adjective for ship - to make it flow a little more smoothly. And I agree with the others who said the last two lines of the last stanza would carry more weight if they rhymed like the rest.
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RE: The wharfie - by Weeded - 09-17-2015, 09:01 PM
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RE: The wharfie - by spherical - 09-18-2015, 01:12 AM
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RE: The wharfie - by Jezie - 10-11-2015, 04:03 PM
RE: The wharfie - by RiverNotch - 10-17-2015, 04:18 PM
RE: The wharfie - by Genuinebloke - 10-26-2015, 07:12 AM
RE: The wharfie - by billy - 10-26-2015, 10:42 AM
RE: The wharfie - by phil194 - 10-27-2015, 01:21 AM
RE: The wharfie - by AshleighWood - 10-28-2015, 12:02 PM
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