October the First

[AshleighWood]

I really liked the verse,

It makes the fall leaves fall harder.
Like the world collapses-
Or at least a world collapses-
As each one tumbles down

I like the play on falling and collapsing leaves and worlds. Maybe "like the world collapsing" or "like the world, collapsing" also works.

I like the continued theme and the self doubt of,

But if I am the leaf,
No shoe has cared enough to notice me,
To come across me,
Even to step on me.

Alternatively this could be more declarative, bitter even!

I am the leaf,
That no shoe cared to notice,
...