Looking out

[RiverNotch]

I like this one. You really do seem to be getting the hang of this The last two lines feel too repetitive (pours and wet implying each other, I mean) without being a reinforcement of a real turn, though. I would suggest something other than wet, instead: there's something very specific about that shower's season to me, but of course you were the one who had the experience. Other than that, this is tight, tangible, and there's a much stronger hit of thought without having actually been thought of (no metaphors that are metaphors, I mean), and the picture works much better here, with the polaroid effect enhancing the immediacy.

Yes, things been a click'n in my head about this stuff. 

I agree about pours and wet. I see now that part two of the haiku should not be directly related to part two, should be a spearate concrete image from the whole however. "this wet morning" would have been enough, no?

Thank you for your comments 

it's not that the two words are related, it's just that, at least for me, they feel redundant. I think the picture and the word 'refreshed' already effectively show the wetwork of the last line, so that the word 'wet' just ends up being an explicit show of what's already said, and the way it shows it doesn't really feel or run like anything, to me (i mean, neither scene nor feeling is that wet--perhaps if there was a flood). there's something else, here, that's more worthy of being said than the total unity of the waters, but that's up to you.
nevertheless, even without the big surprise, you're very close here to a total experience, at least with the added context of the picture. and ray, those basho ones are really, really beautiful, though it's kinda hard to read them all in one go -- hard to travel through so many places in a minute.