At Dusk

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walking at dusk
acorns sprinkle
the blacktop road

I'm having trouble with active acorns. I don't think you need the word 'road' there.

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walking at dusk
acorns sprinkle
the blacktop road

Hi - nice snapshot, but I'm having trouble with active acorns. The way this is written, the acorns could be walking at dusk, sprinkling the blacktop with something.

Walking along the road by my house one early evening, several very large oak trees, at the same time and to my amazement, were radomly but steadily dropping acorns to the ground. They sprinkled down all around the trees, some on the earth, some on the road, one on top of my head :-) It reminded me of how water radomly drops off leaves after the rain has stopped. 

Does this help?

walking at dusk-
acorns sprinkle
the blacktop road

You might try to get in the sound of them falling,  or the bop on the head, or that might be haiku #2.

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