Dad's Angry at Me

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Dad's Angry at Me



With that stern looks of his face Not sure if this line has typos or it's meant to read from the perspective of a 3rd grader. If it's the latter I'd avoid using vocabulary like "rabid" as its confusing the context.
and those hints of rabid anger in his speech
he’s coming to me. 

In his hand
he holds that brown sandal.
With an intimidating posture
and his reddened cheeks
I can tell he is angry We've already established the father is angry, maybe remove/edit this line
and not in control of himself.

He grabs me
and puts me face down on his knee. I'm trying to envision this image but it's proven to be quite difficult. Perhaps a rewording here.
My heartbeat races .

There is no escape.
I am powerless.

I left my shoes in the middle of the floor again.
I am the most incompetent,
patetic, pathetic
scatterbrained,
3rd grader in the world. I may be wrong here but you may have to spell out third here.

I am a failure.

I can’t do anything right.

With full confidence in a steady stern voice, he says
“You will thank me when you get older”

Whack- The hyphens come off a bit weak here. Perhaps an ! would bring more to the onomatopoeia here.
Whack-
Whack-

Face down on my knees, If this is the image you intended to convey in L11 it makes a lot more sense here. You may also not need this line as Its already been provided in the line above (if this is indeed the same image)
Tears cover my face.
My nose runs profusely;
I am not in control of myself.

I am irritated by my own stupidity.

He walks away, with no remorse in his eyes .

I continue crying. This ending doesn't do much for me.. To be blunt, I simply don't care, I feel no connection to the narrator (even though I've been in the same shoes) there's no point to be drawn from this, other than getting spanked sucks. I think the imagery, plot, and realism in this poem could have meaning if a better point was drawn around it. It maybe lost in me, but maybe you should take a step back and ask yourself what do I really want to convey here? If this is a self-pity poem there's really not much to it in terms of power and effect. But with a couple edits here and there, I believe you can turn this into something deep, and meaningful. Thanks for the poem, it definitely brought back memories that's forsure! 

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Bluntness commentary encouraged
-Clay