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Elevator to the Moon
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10-02-2015, 01:11 PM
we need more than a one liner when it comes to feedback in the three main poetry forums. please have a look at the rules/guide in the help section and the welcome letter./mod
I felt like the last stanza was a bit blocky and could possibly use a bit sharpness to it. Something like the vivid imagery above. |
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Elevator to the Moon - by Weeded - 09-29-2015, 11:18 PM
RE: Elevator to the Moon - by rowens - 09-30-2015, 06:30 AM
RE: Elevator to the Moon - by Weeded - 09-30-2015, 08:38 AM
RE: Elevator to the Moon - by milo - 09-30-2015, 09:51 AM
RE: Elevator to the Moon - by Weeded - 09-30-2015, 10:06 AM
RE: Elevator to the Moon - by skadragon - 09-30-2015, 03:00 PM
RE: Elevator to the Moon - by Weeded - 09-30-2015, 08:41 PM
RE: Elevator to the Moon - by Noydian Slip - 10-01-2015, 02:49 PM
RE: Elevator to the Moon - by Weeded - 10-02-2015, 01:07 PM
RE: Elevator to the Moon - by elviaje26 - 10-02-2015, 01:11 PM
RE: Elevator to the Moon - by Weeded - 10-03-2015, 04:12 AM
RE: Elevator to the Moon - by Noydian Slip - 10-03-2015, 02:24 PM
RE: Elevator to the Moon - by Weeded - 10-04-2015, 08:06 AM
RE: Elevator to the Moon - by ZacharyTwedell - 10-05-2015, 01:14 AM
RE: Elevator to the Moon - by Weeded - 10-05-2015, 05:56 PM
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