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Elevator to the Moon
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09-30-2015, 03:00 PM
I see great possibility with this. Plus, I love the space elevator idea! I have for years. I know you went for no specific poetic structure but I think it could use more consistency in a revision. For instance the last stanza seems bloated and sorta drags. The bright, fantastic feel is gone. I'd also suggest brainstorming some other ideas to merge into this one. Something that could give it a hint of story or a transition maybe.
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Elevator to the Moon - by Weeded - 09-29-2015, 11:18 PM
RE: Elevator to the Moon - by rowens - 09-30-2015, 06:30 AM
RE: Elevator to the Moon - by Weeded - 09-30-2015, 08:38 AM
RE: Elevator to the Moon - by milo - 09-30-2015, 09:51 AM
RE: Elevator to the Moon - by Weeded - 09-30-2015, 10:06 AM
RE: Elevator to the Moon - by skadragon - 09-30-2015, 03:00 PM
RE: Elevator to the Moon - by Weeded - 09-30-2015, 08:41 PM
RE: Elevator to the Moon - by Noydian Slip - 10-01-2015, 02:49 PM
RE: Elevator to the Moon - by Weeded - 10-02-2015, 01:07 PM
RE: Elevator to the Moon - by elviaje26 - 10-02-2015, 01:11 PM
RE: Elevator to the Moon - by Weeded - 10-03-2015, 04:12 AM
RE: Elevator to the Moon - by Noydian Slip - 10-03-2015, 02:24 PM
RE: Elevator to the Moon - by Weeded - 10-04-2015, 08:06 AM
RE: Elevator to the Moon - by ZacharyTwedell - 10-05-2015, 01:14 AM
RE: Elevator to the Moon - by Weeded - 10-05-2015, 05:56 PM
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