09-28-2015, 11:01 PM
Seems like a case where you could say anything. Any thought that comes into your head can be put into it. It looks like one of the Making Connections poems that people make, linking thoughts together, or maybe call them Logic Making poems. The problem with them is they don't hold together. But if you kept at it, this kind of poetry can lead to Myth Making poetry, which is held together well. Anybody can do what you did here, rambling logic is easy logic whether it makes good points or not, and doesn't make for good poetry but for random occasions.