Hey, Lexi
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(09-15-2015, 07:34 AM)H[a/o]llowheart Wrote:  Did you hear? Freckled boy’s off early
Heading northward, filling new faces with mirth
Back by the thaw with fresh zeal
Impressive, thought it doesn’t interest me

Smoke-braided girl grew! Inky cotton swirling skyward
Seasonal tempest, ebbing closer, farther, closer,
farther still, towards the celestial throne room
But hey, I could have beaten her there

Surely, mouse boy remembers our scavenging days
Dumpster side rendezvous were my favorite! Though
not Redwall troupe’s taste, neither his
That’s fine, I didn’t need him anyway

Who didn’t give the lazing lioness berth?
Bounding through caramel savannas, roaring at whim
She might relish in her pride
But I never feared her


I still envision the black ice man
One night, losing everything, frozen in childhood
Gliding from skyscrapers, guarding peace. I’m sure
I could remake his glossy-page dynasty

You could too, right? The invincible cheetah
who cheated death and outpaced it still
Neither churning waters stained red
nor splintered bone could slow your stride

Astonishing, breath-taking, but I have you beat:
You could never run from your problems half as fast as me
Hi, welcome to the Pig Pen. While I enjoy the tone and pace of this piece I have been struggling for days to find something that would let me in on what seemed to be a pile of personal references. Today I googled Redwall. Is the poem something people who are familiar with the books would find more understandable, or is it me? Smile
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Hey, Lexi - by H[a/o]llowheart - 09-15-2015, 07:34 AM
RE: Hey, Lexi - by toinfinity - 09-17-2015, 02:59 PM
RE: Hey, Lexi - by Weeded - 09-17-2015, 08:30 PM
RE: Hey, Lexi - by spherical - 09-18-2015, 01:19 AM
RE: Hey, Lexi - by ellajam - 09-18-2015, 01:45 AM
RE: Hey, Lexi - by H[a/o]llowheart - 09-18-2015, 08:20 AM
RE: Hey, Lexi - by ellajam - 09-18-2015, 10:05 AM
RE: Hey, Lexi - by H[a/o]llowheart - 09-18-2015, 10:39 AM
RE: Hey, Lexi - by Weeded - 09-18-2015, 10:22 AM
RE: Hey, Lexi - by ellajam - 09-18-2015, 12:01 PM



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