09-18-2015, 12:20 AM
Hi Joesammington,
I enjoyed reading your poem. The only suggestion I have is to change the last line as it doesn't follow the rhyme scheme of the rest of the poem causing the character's significant triumph to come off a little flat.
I enjoyed reading your poem. The only suggestion I have is to change the last line as it doesn't follow the rhyme scheme of the rest of the poem causing the character's significant triumph to come off a little flat.