09-16-2015, 02:40 AM
Thanks for the further input. It's interesting how people read it differently: my intention was that the high spring tides in September (often with gales) results in foamy seas. These then wash the mermaid's hair. It's not that the seas 'foam and wash...' i.e. her hair was foamed.
Perhaps I need, Seas foam, and wash... etc. So much to say in so few words!
Cheers again.
Perhaps I need, Seas foam, and wash... etc. So much to say in so few words!
Cheers again.
(09-15-2015, 11:22 PM)Mark A Becker Wrote: ... Being born on the autumnal equinox, I am always aware of its approach, but have yet to write a poem about it...Off you go, then.
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... Mark
A poet who can't make the language sing doesn't start. Hence the shortage of real poems amongst the global planktonic field of duds. - Clive James.

