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[peacejazzspirit]

Hello and welcome, Jezie.
I do not think you should scrap the last stanza. You're displaying your vantage-point in the first stanza and the other person's in the third, and in the second you are binding them together. I connect with this poem, my sight is not the best and I have a friend who is partially deaf. Some thoughts:

Sit with me on the porch swing,
Make no more apologies Semicrkon at the end of this line and no capital at the beginning.
I am deaf and your sight fades, There must be another way to phrase it: I lack sound, while your sight fades, perhaps?
But do not become dismayed. I don't see why you capitalized the beginning of the line, doesn't need it.
Tell me of your favorite song,
Play it, and sing along.

Did you notice how your cup vibrates?
Feel the beat in your fingertips,
Do not grip it so tightly, Suggestion: Do not grip it too tightly,
Just lightly rest your hand against it. I like this stanza, it is giving the other person a glimpse into how you experience sound.

We can still listen together.
Sing your heart out,
Let me enjoy watching you,
'I' promise this does not hurt or bother me,
You be you and I will be me.

Does it bother you I can describe a bird sitting in a tree?
With you describing the sound we can enjoy the bird in its entirety.
You as blind, me as deaf(,)
We can still enjoy life's zest.

help... Thinking I need to scrap second stanza all together....

This is a good piece, but I think a little wordy in some of the longer lines. Also, it's not necessary to capitalize the beginning of each line, only when you end the previous line with a period, or obviously if you begin it with I. The title works well for me. And no, it wouldn't bother me if you described a bird in a tree, or anything else, really I'd appreciate it