09-09-2015, 10:53 PM
Yuss!
Word choices et al are nigh perfect (one marked down only because this isn't five hundred years old, hehehe), and the movement of the story is stunning: the pre-turn part has an incredible u shape, that, with each image, flits so smoothly between the direct and the symbolic, while the post-turn is such a brilliant uplifting of the entire message, even as it works to close the ring; and the whole feels so free, so pure, so immediately creative and yet thematically eternal...
Word choices et al are nigh perfect (one marked down only because this isn't five hundred years old, hehehe), and the movement of the story is stunning: the pre-turn part has an incredible u shape, that, with each image, flits so smoothly between the direct and the symbolic, while the post-turn is such a brilliant uplifting of the entire message, even as it works to close the ring; and the whole feels so free, so pure, so immediately creative and yet thematically eternal...