Columbia

[kaxtar1]

COLUMBIA

the capital club
zero-plot lined
in their red light district
fishnet attorneys slurping sternly
tannins out of sippy cups,
no worry
‘cause it’s easy,
chuck the plastic in the drain and
the checks out the bank,
aqueduct it to the kind of kind
men who’ll fix your tax
adjusted time in bombs
and the length of red tape
to their legs,
and their rods,
under their suits the porno shoot
is explicit, so silver
screen the calls to god before
it smells like fish in the district
too late,
he jumped off the railing
while we were sailing
for the new world,
old girl,
beat her up,
roll her over
in bed with a politician

This poem made me smile because it shines with raw talent and efficiency.  The phrasing is deadly precise and lets your mind wander in the story of the POEM.  That being said, I BELIEVE the poem focuses on the disrepair of the country formally known as Columbia.  Personally, the poem is fantastic and the flaws in it only stylize the flawed nature of the place you took me to.  It probably would never be published in this format but it's so good it wouldn't be worth changing.  The only part I don't get is the part where the man jumps off the railing, if the narrative would be consistent the girl would be pushed off the railing.  Any explaining would be notedly welcomed


QUICK EDIT: If you wanna see more positive and raving reviews, dumb down the vehicle for your message, most people, even intelligent people could piece this piece together, but seeing the cleverness in it and connecting the stray bullets (see silver screen/porno) would be very difficult for most people.