Virtuality

[peacejazzspirit]

Love this Mark! :j An account of transcendence of the boundaries of our body into pure freedom. I've written a poem similar to yours style-wise, but after reaching 10 syllables I worked it back down to one line by line. I like the piece as is but maybe consider working it back down to 1 describing the aftermath of "breaking free of gravity's pliers". It's great as it is though so if you want, dismiss my suggestion.

Hey PjazzS-

I almost hate to admit it, but another "device" I got going is that the piece intentionally stops at it's "heaviest" point (syllable-wise), thereby (trying) to imply that the character is actually not getting what s/he thinks... The whole irony of the "freedom" of the virtual reality "thing": aka virtuality.

OK, there ya go, folks, load up and fire away". I can't help it sometimes, as the cleverness gene takes over and I just let it happen because it's so easy. Yep, CHEAP & EASY-- that really is my m.o. and I am GUILTY as charged.

Of course, that is why I post this stuff in MISC, because I also know I'm too lazy/butt-headed on the ones I post in this area to go back and change much.

I am skinny, but I'm still a big target, and (know what?) I don't mind taking the flak. Go ahead and fire away, cause I got more clever than you got bullets. The day that I'm afraid of virtual bullets is the day that one can actually hit me.

Til then, yours truly, an unrepentant repeat offender,
... Mark

I think I hit a button.

Shoot, I missed that... I love irony and should have caught it! My bad LOL.