Virtuality
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you had me to that last line.

it works and it obviously fits the form but the reach of the stars is pretty cliche. a suggestion would be;

to awaken beyond reach of these stars

to awaken beyond this universe

liked the constant connection with gravity

gravities pliers is a great image
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Virtuality - by Mark A Becker - 09-06-2015, 10:42 AM
RE: Virtuality - by billy - 09-06-2015, 11:04 AM
RE: Virtuality - by RiverNotch - 09-06-2015, 04:41 PM
RE: Virtuality - by Mark A Becker - 09-06-2015, 10:15 PM
RE: Virtuality - by peacejazzspirit - 09-07-2015, 12:58 AM
RE: Virtuality - by Mark A Becker - 09-07-2015, 04:07 AM
RE: Virtuality - by peacejazzspirit - 09-07-2015, 05:07 AM
RE: Virtuality - by Mark A Becker - 09-07-2015, 07:56 AM



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