08-25-2015, 03:14 AM
Hi,
Yeah, just on the same lines as the other feedback. I really liked all the juicy words, but just had trouble taking them all in and making them make sense. I left it thinking it had something to do with oil, and oil rig workers (sorry!).
I think a bit of trimming...quite a bit, and you'll have a winner. As a wise man once said "Please put down the machine gun and I bet you'll hit the target more frequently, and more cleanly. Right now you're blasting through the entire shooting range and killing everybody in it."
You have tons of stuff to work with so finding content seems not to be a problem.
Yeah, just on the same lines as the other feedback. I really liked all the juicy words, but just had trouble taking them all in and making them make sense. I left it thinking it had something to do with oil, and oil rig workers (sorry!).
I think a bit of trimming...quite a bit, and you'll have a winner. As a wise man once said "Please put down the machine gun and I bet you'll hit the target more frequently, and more cleanly. Right now you're blasting through the entire shooting range and killing everybody in it."
You have tons of stuff to work with so finding content seems not to be a problem.