08-22-2015, 07:28 PM
I don't feel there was too much ambiguity, after a brief pause to think about it. And I'm sorry that you feel this way if you do... I like the pattern set with the first 3 stanzas, I think you should continue it. Also, the imagery used in the first three falls off in the end as well. I know you have more!!! And, it could just be me, I think having the last stanza, rather than the penultimate, refer to the opening would give it more of a finished feeling. I love the concept though, the 'thing' that everyone sees but nobody wants to mention. And just so everyone knows you're ok, you should leave a comment. =D