First post.

[Misanthrope]

Hello again Mis-
Getting closer, especially with the meter.

Drifting into imagination
The land of limitless creation
Trees of chocolate, rivers of gold
Blissfully watch my planet unfold
Mountains move to adorn the sunriseC'mon. I know you can hear that the meter clunked here
To make this day perfect in my eyes
Alas, my efforts are all for naughtFunny that this metrically ok line comes immediately after the breakdown in meter
It appears there's something I forgot
Open my eyes, beside me you dream
I need nothing more, for you are my themeDANG!  You never want a red flag like this at the very end:  the forced rhyme just killed the poem-- blammo! right between the ears. The poetry police hereby charge you with poemicide in the 1st degree. You know your writes.

As I implied at the top, you are very close to getting this right, and you have already improved this piece.  Though this is the NOVICE forum, I really think that you are ready to handle the "complaint" about the last line:  all you need to do is look up the word "theme" to know that it is a terrible choice.  You gotta fix this, please.  

" I love you, you are my theme."  If I said that to my spouse, she'd probably say, "Do I really look like wallpaper to you?"  Goof example, but, you see what I mean?

Forced rhyming is deadly.  At least you killed the poem instantly.  

Please do not take it personally, though, as I really do want to see you make this poem work, and you are very close.  The GOOD NEWS is that I am sure that you can do it, based upon the previous improvement.  

Go for it.

... Mark

I changed it again, but I'm not sure how to stray from the cheesy/cliche ending....  That was the intent for it I suppose.  To me, the entire idea of creation this 'perfect' world is cliche so the ending I guess is apropos.  Always open to suggestions!  Keep them coming!  And thank you for the input!!!