08-17-2015, 05:55 PM
(08-17-2015, 04:31 PM)ThePen Wrote: Your line "And start with And and then the whole work hurt" is a bit vague to me.The whole piece is a spoof on the grammatical structure of a sonnet. Starting a line with AND (plus inversion) normally gets the no-no in modern poetry. Plus I wanted to make sure about the metrics.
Thanks for taking the time to read it. I'm looking forward to working on The Pike - after I get the outboard electrics fixed.
A poet who can't make the language sing doesn't start. Hence the shortage of real poems amongst the global planktonic field of duds. - Clive James.