Sonnet on Questions on Sonnets

[ThePen]

Ella suggested that The Pike may work as a sonnet. And then I realised -

I've never written in such form before
and know not whether grammar to invert.
Or force some rhyme and garner others' ire
And start with And and then the whole work hurt.

But sonnet forms hark back to ancient times,
which leads me to believe they're worth their salt.
So many love their sing-song pattern rhymes
that any other form amounts to fault.

I'll start each line with Shift pressed firmly down
And wait and see if there's some modern take
That punctuation can't be broken down
It must be there and not dumped in the lake

So off we go with this my first attempt.
I know, I know, it's dreadfully unkempt.

I think that this poem is pretty good. I appreciate the fact that it flows pretty easily. Your writing is pretty easy-going.

Your line "And start with And and then the whole work hurt" is a bit vague to me. I think that, however, you get lost in the subject matter. The third stanza is mostly filler without much substance. It seems that you are mostly trying to rhyme in this stanza without adding anything worthy of note.

And the last stanza departs from the previous three. I still think that this is a good effort.