08-17-2015, 04:51 AM
Metapoetry is such fun, and metasonnets even moreso. Because of your second line, you effectively get away with all inversions and forced rhyme, which is a neat trick. The only time this doesn't come off well is your take/lake rhyme, which is stretching the humour beyond breaking point and a very clear "yep, can't think of anything better here". Love the couplet. This was a very enjoyable read, thanks John.
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