The Pike

[just mercedes]

Your poem took me straight into the moat, with Merlin and Arthur (Wart) and the King Pike. (The Once and Future King) Your pike also portrays strength, and a sense of evil that comes from power. You've already had good advice about rhyme, and I noticed that you maintain meter well, throughout the poem. I agree that the title should be a stronger hook. A stronger ending is a good idea too. It just tails away at the moment, fin-ishes low on the scale of closure. Thanks for the read, I enjoyed!