08-09-2015, 02:03 PM
Hi Wjames,
The title change really helps. It works as the key to unlock the why behind the audience reactions, it sets the stage.
I love the dizzy feeling I get reading this one, first it's a play, then it's food, then it's emotional baggage, it's like a Russian nesting doll of images. Also it's such an interesting way to say you get out of it what you bring into it. Poetry is a bit the same way I would think. Anyway, just stopped by to say I like it.
--Quix
The title change really helps. It works as the key to unlock the why behind the audience reactions, it sets the stage.
I love the dizzy feeling I get reading this one, first it's a play, then it's food, then it's emotional baggage, it's like a Russian nesting doll of images. Also it's such an interesting way to say you get out of it what you bring into it. Poetry is a bit the same way I would think. Anyway, just stopped by to say I like it.--Quix
(08-05-2015, 02:29 PM)Wjames Wrote: Our play, a meandering
extravagance of conversation,
walks like an overweight chef
towards a pastry pantry flour drawer.
A man in the front row smells the rising yeast
and smiles, perhaps remembering
the slow baked tarts of grandmother’s
clean tiled kitchen.
Behind him,
a woman tastes her husband’s
black crust pie, choking down vomit
as a scowl forms.
The Soufflé isn’t the soufflé; the soufflé is the recipe. --Clara