08-07-2015, 10:29 PM
Hey news-
The ending was worth the price of admission for me:
...I wanted to lurk
into her skin. Up her
smile. Alone in her thoughts.
The entire poem moves toward this ending, and I must say that I really, really like when a poem does that... sneaks up on you. Or in this case, sneaks into her...
The lusting is very well conveyed with the line breaks. cool beans. ballsballsballsindeed
... Mark
The ending was worth the price of admission for me:
...I wanted to lurk
into her skin. Up her
smile. Alone in her thoughts.
The entire poem moves toward this ending, and I must say that I really, really like when a poem does that... sneaks up on you. Or in this case, sneaks into her...
The lusting is very well conveyed with the line breaks. cool beans. ballsballsballsindeed
... Mark