Love is like a flower

[billy]

calm down people, it's a poetry thread. /mod

the bench or a bench, should we know this bench?

the poem has too many clichés. say it in a fresh way. the concept is extremely cliche...my love is like a red red rose...and there are hundreds more ways the same thing has been stated.

We sit on the bench, watching the river
As it slowly passes along a wasted line, [pass by] give an image to the reader [like a....fat snake] or wet brush stroke]
I hold you as you quiver quiver is forced. and the next line is too weak.
and say you’ve done nothing wrong

Neither have I, for love is not everlasting
All good things must come to an end
Please take me at my word
When I say I want to remain your friend

I pick up a red rose
A gust of wind blows its petals away
I am sorry they have left
Yet I don't want them to stay

A bittersweet air hangs before us
A beautiful twilight flashes into my eye
Loves is like a flower
For even the most beautiful kinds die