08-01-2015, 11:17 AM
Yeah, like billy said, this ain't free verse. It has a rhyme and meter scheme. My suggestion to you would be to read it as such back to yourself, almost like you were performing it. Make adjustments to the flow of it.
I do like that Virgin Mary/Holy sperm idea...turning it into something modern, as modern as a drunken conquest at a frat party.
I do like that Virgin Mary/Holy sperm idea...turning it into something modern, as modern as a drunken conquest at a frat party.
You can't hate me more than I hate myself. I win.
"When the spirit of justice eloped on the wings
Of a quivering vibrato's bittersweet sting."
"When the spirit of justice eloped on the wings
Of a quivering vibrato's bittersweet sting."