07-28-2015, 12:19 AM
Hi, I also like this piece and the title is perfect. I was expecting more use of onomatopoeia (thank fuck for copy+paste) bearing in mind the title.
The only bit of crit I would offer would be to drop the third 'the' in the first stanza, it doesn't seem right when read out loud.
The only other thing that I will add, which will be of no help whatsoever is that 'Percussion' is an anagram of 'Supersonic' or more appropriately 'super sonic'. Like I said not much help, but interesting I'm sure you'll agree.
Thanks for the read,
Mark
The only bit of crit I would offer would be to drop the third 'the' in the first stanza, it doesn't seem right when read out loud.
The only other thing that I will add, which will be of no help whatsoever is that 'Percussion' is an anagram of 'Supersonic' or more appropriately 'super sonic'. Like I said not much help, but interesting I'm sure you'll agree.
Thanks for the read,
Mark
wae aye man ye radgie