Flight

[fluorescent.43]

thanks Betralion for the critique. you made some great points, but i think you may have missed the fact that much of this poem was metaphorical... not really literal. cocking a gun or playing with the clouds doesn't necessarily mean that i'm actually cocking a gun or playing with the clouds (which is impossible, as you noted). i'd thought it'd be quite clear reading through it, but i guess i'm totally wrong about that.  hanks for the opinions, though.