07-23-2015, 03:19 AM
Hey Wj-
I like the sing song feel of this piece, which is in line with the content (reading a children's book).
Just a suggestion, below:
I sat on the deck, rocking my chair
to the rhythm of the rhymes
in a children's book.
Rain fell on the metal roof,
backing the lines with a steady beat,
like a laid back snare.
I like the sing song feel of this piece, which is in line with the content (reading a children's book).
Just a suggestion, below:
I sat on the deck, rocking my chair
to the rhythm of the rhymes
in a children's book.
Rain fell on the metal roof,
backing the lines with a steady beat,
like a laid back snare.