I Am No Victim

[cjchaffin]

Usually they start with the victim. great opening
I walked in on you and her.
But you walked in on me, him
me, him.
I was going to say it was only once
(it wasn’t) this commentary and the next work well, unlike the third and fourth in parentheses
or that is was a mistake
(it was).
You left quietly,
no longer chatting away,
and the remains of my excuses dried on my skin. i would break the poem into 2 strophes right here, it would slow down the read a bit and give it better pacing...
I used all of the hot water
(you left a lot) this commentary and the next don't really add anything to the poem, imho
and all the soap
(all the soap that didn’t smell like you)
and scoured the guilt off of me.
I packed, emailed the landlord, and bought a one way ticket to  the one way ticket is cliche, do you really need it? say exactly where you ended up, it's important
wherever.

I need another shower. i get why this is here but it feels too obvious an ending to be on its own; it needs to be a tad stronger

i like the use of the shower as metaphor. it works, even if it's been done before (but then again, what hasn't?). 
what i like is the perspective from which this is written, because as the narrator so plainly states in the beginning,
the attention is usually placed first on the victim; not so, in this case, and that is what caught my interest and held it here.

a few hiccups along the way...i pointed them out in context. 
and i think you could break this into two strophes and it would read better.
i like where this is going, though. nicely done.